... is what you are hearing now. Though I was truly sorry to see that the spooning didn't work for them at first, the shoulder-to-shoulder-leg-over-leg move is good too. Hopefully they will get it in time. Spooning is definitely an art form that one does not master right away; it took years of training for me.
I agree with he1vetia. Your description of the kids and their tense interactions with each other and sometimes with Toby is priceless. You have an incredible grasp on the emotions and inner working of these people. I love it!
Now, this may sound like picky criticism, but it's not... Every once in a while I notice that these characters say things in a way that an American would not. (i.e., "He was different to you." as opposed to "He was different *from* you"). I hope you don't mind me compensating with the "US-appropriate" equivalencies as I read, but I also hope you don't mind that I delight in imagining Elliot's Queens' accent or Toby's speech patterns mixing with a dialect from another part of the world. It's part of the charm of this story too. This is, after all, another world to both of them in a way. :)
With all that said, I too am curious to see what happens when Elliot learns more about what Chris had done before Oz besides armed robbery, murder, and doing copious amounts of speed. However, I am not going to project gloom and doom. Not yet anyway. :)
Thanks again! Looking forward to the next installment.
The contented sigh of a romantic yankee sap...
I agree with he1vetia. Your description of the kids and their tense interactions with each other and sometimes with Toby is priceless. You have an incredible grasp on the emotions and inner working of these people. I love it!
Now, this may sound like picky criticism, but it's not... Every once in a while I notice that these characters say things in a way that an American would not. (i.e., "He was different to you." as opposed to "He was different *from* you"). I hope you don't mind me compensating with the "US-appropriate" equivalencies as I read, but I also hope you don't mind that I delight in imagining Elliot's Queens' accent or Toby's speech patterns mixing with a dialect from another part of the world. It's part of the charm of this story too. This is, after all, another world to both of them in a way. :)
With all that said, I too am curious to see what happens when Elliot learns more about what Chris had done before Oz besides armed robbery, murder, and doing copious amounts of speed. However, I am not going to project gloom and doom. Not yet anyway. :)
Thanks again! Looking forward to the next installment.